Rapids

Short poem please read and rate?

apathy kills (mind chatter) stream of consciousness dreams of monstrousness nightmares portentous rage in dreams unconscious bring down the dams you've built uptown and downriver and let the rapids light your world.

Public Comments

1. sounds good to me... like its kinda saying to stop being afriad of what you are and been proud of what you could be!!!! On a scale of 1-10 I would give you an 8... only because you could have added more detail... to keep the readers mind wondering.... but its really good... I WRITE poems too... maybe I will add some here!
2. i dont get sorry but i dont but that doesnt mean you should stop lol keep trying it seems good i would give it a 6 cuz i didnt get it lol XD ELLIE
3. Sounds a little depressing. Nice vocabulay, Though. Might want to make it longer. Great rymes. Overall, 8/10.
4. I rate it PG-13 for monstrousness.
5. Here is a fine poem: bring down the dams you've built and let the rapids light your world.